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Swift and sweet
Marked his flight
Into the chaotic pit of hell
Oh…..how he fell
Was tragically epic
The stuff of horror tales
But before falling
He was heaven bound
For on earth he was renowned
As the highest of all angels
Brightest in the sky
Wisdom for the calling
For his love I resulted to crawling
He was profound
A king crowned-
By me of course
For he was the source of my pleasure
My happiness…….
My pain
I built my dreams around him
For we were more than just a whim
He was my destiny
But the world is harsh
And some become victims
To its seduction
Resulting in their destruction
He was one such prey
So I lost my future
In the spiraling descent of my fallen angel
Whose life I couldn’t save
For he became a slave
To the addiction that drugs induce
From king to pauper
Existing….to being better off dead
So I decided to end his decline by putting a bullet in his head
And yes…..swift and sweet
Marked his flight
Into the chaotic pit of hell
Oh…..how he fell
Was tragically epic
The stuff of horror tales
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Hello Poetressforever,
Sad tale as who knows what shall become of the one you love... At a time this brother was your king and more... Sadly he fell to the hands of addiction and that became his life... In summary, one can't save those who don't want to be saved...
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PoeticSpace - The One In Charge
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That's a good poem. A lot of devotion was there & I know it couldn't have been easy. It was a great poem.
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LOVELY POET
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| POSTED BY: tweezy on 08/25/08 @ 10:22 PM |
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HI I LOVED THE POME EVERY WORD IT MADE ME THINK THANKS FOR SHAREING
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Thanks for the feed back, I really appreciate it.  I wrote this poem as an analogy of Lucifer being cast from heaven into hell, and the fact that if Lucifer, who was once an angel, could fall from grace then we as people sure will. I also wanted to make the point that it is not wise for people to place others on pedestals and to build their entire lives around them, because nothing is guaranteed. By the end of the poem you realize that both parties lose their lives; one dies and the other will obviously go to jail. But not only were lives lost so were the hopes and dreams the woman had planned for their future, the love she had for the man, the faith she had in him....etc |
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| POSTED BY: Slendah on 08/31/08 @ 11:21 AM |
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Oh my, such a sad, sad tale. This poem really grabs your attention and emotions.
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Do your best, let God do the rest! Keep a happy heart and a positive mind!
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Yes I agree it is sad, but also very true for many folks.
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| POSTED BY: asIam on 09/04/08 @ 05:49 AM |
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I enjoyed this poem, i agree the tone is a little sad but its real and i like that, i like how you compared him to Lucifer in the beginning as far as him being heaven bound and then his plight to this world ending with you putting him out of his misery, reminds me of a battle that most saints today lose. nice flow and story line. Peace and blessings!
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loving you is like a song i replay every 3 mins and 30secs of everyday~L.Hill
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